Saturday, March 3, 2012

Not So Sweet Saturday Sample

Breeana exhaled, her breath clouded the glass. She wrote Mel in the small patch of moisture and encased his name inside a heart. He would be awake by now. Probably getting ready to go hunting.

Her stomach clenched as if a giant fist had closed around it, squeezing.

She sniffed, catching her faint reflection in the glass. When she saw the sparkle of tears and the dead look in her eyes, her hands curled into tight fists as anger blazed through her.

“I hope you're as miserable as me you rotten son-of-a-bitch! I hope you feel as dead inside—as destroyed—as I do.”

Her face crumpled and she hugged her middle, trying to hold herself together, but it didn't work. Great wracking sobs tore from her throat.

Rage edged around the pain. Abruptly, her sobs turned to screams. She pounded her fists against the glass, then furiously smeared his name. “You bastard! How could you do this to me? How could you—”

17 comments:

Sheri Fredricks said...

I'm there with Breeana. I can see her steaming the glass and writing Mel's name. The way you've shown her has me agonizing along with her.

Spectacular writing.

Lisa Kumar said...

Great snippet--and great book!

Brenda said...

Thanks, Sherri.
Yeah, I have been there before in my real life. The only difference was I bruised my hand, lol.

Brenda said...

Aw, thank you, Lisa. And thanks for coming by.

Sharon Cullen said...

Very emotional scene. Loved it!

Brenda said...

Thank you, Sharon. And thank you for coming by.

Maggie O'Malley said...

Great scene!

Brenda said...

Thank you, Maggie.

Sara Walter Ellwood / Cera duBois said...

Oh, what fantastic emotion...Great scene, Brenda...

Brenda said...

Thank you, Sara! And I really appreciate you coming by!

Duckie said...

daymn girl! love it!

Brenda said...

DUCKIE!!! LOL, where the heck have you been?
I'm so happy you stopped by!

Duckie said...

lol...the moon apparently..lol...

Brenda said...

Well stop going to the moon. Stay here with the rest of us, lol.

Duckie said...

i'll hang up the space suit...for now...lol

Jenna said...

What the heck did he do? I can guess, but I'm afraid to. Such an emotionally charged scene. Can't wait to read this. :)

Sara Walter Ellwood / Cera duBois said...

Wow! What an emotional scene. I'm afraid to ask what the heck did he do to her?